Whelp, it’s done!
First, I’d like to express my undying gratitude for those who read and commented. You folks kept me going. Your comments, thoughts, and feedback about the serial were a joy and brought me back to the keyboard, again and again.
Second, I’d like to thank Shanta, a wonderfully kind and awesome reader who sent me all my typos. (Oh my gosh, there were so many typos). So, if you read the installments a week or so after they were posted, Shanta is the reason there were less goofs in the prose.
Now, for the debrief, if you like this kinda info.
- Start date: April 1, 2020
- Finish date: July 25, 2020
- Total words: 71,877
How do I think the story turned out?
You know what? It’s not too shabby for a first draft. All pieces are there: open, middle, end as well as character arcs with internal, external and romantic conflicts (and all of those had climaxes and resolutions).
So, success! But…
Yep. All the buts. (hehe)
The Opening. The first few chapters will need to be rewritten. The cool feature about hosting the serial on my blog is that I could track views. I was losing readers by Chapter Three. There could be many reasons for that, but I am grateful for the data and will be revising the start of the story.
Dropped Threads. Oh my buttery fingers, there are dropped threads everywhere! I couldn’t bring Rogers, the Kletka, Kin’s mom, or Jacobe (Joia’s brother) back into the story in the way that I’d wished. I even feel that Luna (unconscious or not) needed more time on the page.
Descriptions. The manuscript is bereft of descriptions, and I mean descriptions of everything. I don’t have a physical description of Rez or her friends; Just passable ones for Kin. The setting might as well be a bed sheet. However, for a first draft, this doesn’t surprise me because I am a dialogue-heavy writer. I always focus on what characters will say before I add movement/place to my scenes.
World Building. I got a better sense of Warren’s, the settlement, and the Akupara as the story unfolded. I will need to revise for smoother introduction of the world and revise the parts that didn’t quite work. (Anyone remember Kin’s super sensitive feet? Yeah, I have no idea what I’d planned to do with that either…)
Inconsistencies. Oh, the nagging continuity issues of the story! Kin flops from formal to colloquial. Tech works/doesn’t work as needed for that moment in the story. Kin had his armor on, no power to his external helmet mic, and I think I only mentioned once that his voice was muffled shouting. Sigh. So yes, I need to rethink all of that.
Writing Style. I’d call my writing style for this serial ‘conversational.’ For Rez, I wanted the reader to feel like she was speaking with you. I’m not sure how effectively this came across in third person deep POV (point of view), where at times I gave direct access to her internal monologue. Therefore, I have passages and single lines that read as first person. It’s probably just a mess, and I am not quite sure how to address it yet, if at all.
Grammar and Prose. I really try to not dwell too much on grammar and prose during a first draft. My goal is to get the story written so that I have something to edit. For this story, toward the end, I feel that my prose got looser. Meaning, I was able to write faster by not spending time debating word choice, trimming unconcise language, or (my biggest weakness) eliminating/reducing repetitive words. Oh my. Do you know how many times I used gaze/gazed and look/looks/looked? Those will have to be addressed.
So, what’s next?
Honestly. I don’t know. My family is continuing to practice social distancing, and school will be online in the fall. Which means, the way my life was in March will be the New Normal for the next several months.
However, I had a blast writing about Rez and Kin, and I really got attached to their friends and family, too. I am already mentally plotting stories for them.
This means I have options.
The goal of the serial was to keep me writing, and I am so glad to say that it was a success. Because of that success, I feel like I should continue working on Culler, The Ladyships Book Three rather than prep Slow & Steady for publication or write another story about the Akupara. My plan is to give Culler an earnest try before revisiting Slow & Steady. I imagine Dius fans are happy to hear this. Pyx, Jo, and Emys fans, not so much.
Lastly, I want to thank family, friends, and my author buddies for all your support! Love you guys all so much!
Thank you so much for reading, everyone!
All the best,
July 25, 2020
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